środa, 26 maja 2010

THE PROS AND CONS OF TRAVELLING BY BIKE

When we think about our lives we all see that in some part of our lives we used bike or some of us still use bikes. In common view it has so many good sides to use and travel by bike but on the other side it has kind of problems.

First of all I would like to start with the advantages of travelling by bike such as it is a good kind of exercise that you can make your body work while you are travelling. What is more about the good side of travelling by bike is you do not need to pay for the fuel and it is really economical in that way and thus it is environmental friendly. Moreover when you are using a bike you do not have to wait in that traffic jam like cars, it makes you to reach your destination quicker in busy cities. It also gives you the freedom about the places that you want to go with a bike you can go and travel wherever you want such as mountains and forests.

On the other hand in some way it is dangerous to travel by bike because most of the drivers do not care about the bikes while they are driving and it is also dangerous when u will have an accident. The other unhealthy thing which might make you to be against travelling by bike is you can inhale the unhealthy fumes while you are travelling inside the city or in a highway. Moreover you cannot protect yourself from the weather such as rains, snows and etc. Even though it is a good way to make your body work it is not good for long trips because it takes a lot of time and also makes you really tired.

To sum up, travelling by bike can be a good choice for whom likes sightseeing and fresh weather on mountains on the other side it is definitely not a topic to discuss for people who do not like to do some exercises in their lives.

1 komentarz:

  1. Teacher's comments:

    Good points:
    - very nice lay-out
    - nice paragraphs divisions
    - good and strong arguments for and against
    - many linking phrases

    Bad points:

    - Isn't it better to say to ride a bike/to travel by bike than to use a bike?
    - There are many advantages of travelling by bike
    - There are many problems; bike itself cannot have problems :)
    - go by bike, car, train, plane, etc., not with a bike
    - It can be a good solution for those/people who like ...
    - in the mountains

    and grammar:

    - to make somebody do something => it makes you reach your desitnation or make you be against
    - when + present tense !!!
    - like/ejoy/love/hate + gerund => ... who do not like doing some exercises

    My advice: Please pay more attention to the details. I know that you can write good essays but remember that good arguments are not enough to get a good grade; the small things count too.

    I like your essay very much but I hope you will do it better next time.

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